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Silence
by Deej56. 10/18/17 11:16 PM
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Marble
by Deej56. 10/18/17 11:11 PM
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4 hours ago
Hi, all: With Halloween soon approaching thought I'd post an old, creepy one. Originally wrote it for my nephew when he was 8; my brother wouldn't let me read it to him until he was 12. Probably a good call. Anyways, hope it's worth the read. The Keepers They come around o...
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4 hours ago
Lane, You’re awesomingly (yes, that’s a new word I just made up) prolific. You’ve put up a lot since I’ve last had a chance to post—I’ll comment on a few in separate threads, but start with this one. Great opening first two lines. You lose me in the next two following, but th...
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4 hours ago
Lane, Beautiful lines and imagery throughout this one (really like “but life still leave me its graves to rob”—awesome). I confess though I’m not quite following this one—which, mind you, shouldn’t necessarily mean much. That is, there’s a tangible mood your verse emanates, bu...
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4 hours ago
I really like this one, Lane. There’s a story behind the story that’s engaging. The first two lines of the third verse (beginning with “When breath did not exist”) seem vague to me and may be an opportunity to better move things forward and add depth. Same with the penultimate...
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4 hours ago
Lane, You are the God of killer last lines. Strong effort here form first to last line. Well done! Regards, Deej...
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4 hours ago
Couch, Nice work—as always some great lines; particularly like, “and the cash I count doesn’t count for much”. I might revisit the last of what I’ll call the pre-chorus. Seems like you could upgrade “each new day will feel sublime”, but that's just this sad guy’s opinion. P...
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4 hours ago
Donna, Thanks so much for taking the time to provide such thoughtful comments. It's so appreciated. As for your specific comments, I'll revisit the first line. I had originally written "the love she can't surrender," but maybe just "the man," as that offer...
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Yesterday at 09:15 PM
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=gL1At3QzQWo...
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Yesterday at 08:46 PM
I've seen him four times over the years. My only complaint would be that he made almost everything else I listened to seem flat, lifeless and somehow pointless....
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Yesterday at 07:51 PM
Okie-dokie artichokees, here we go! 2017's version of the "Little Yellow Button" campaign. This will run for a month. Hopefully we can have some fun, appreciate the "community" that is JPFolks, and maybe raise some funds to help keep the JPF Forums functional....
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Yesterday at 07:10 PM
Originally Posted by couchgrouchNWA's lyric and "music" is garbage. I remember that from nearly 30 years. Tennessee wasn't as awful as Fight the Power...it's just dull. The simplistic loop, the tuneless, monotone vocal. The "hook" in the chorus only stands ou...
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Yesterday at 07:05 PM
Great news, stay out of the hospital and in the studio!...
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Yesterday at 07:02 PM
Hi Gavin, It does sound much better. There's a sweet quality to your voice that I can clearly hear cuz it's less obscured. Some notes around "door opened wide" sound sharp or like wrong notes, but there's very few notes that sound flat out wrong, now. I uncheck &quo...
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Yesterday at 08:09 AM
Hello Mike, Thanks a lot for always taking a few minutes to inspect what I'm attempting to do :-) I always appreciate your kind words. Calvin http://www.soundclick.com/bands/0/calvinstewart...
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10/17/17 05:26 PM
Nice to see you back and so strong! Not sure about line one in this couplet It's all my inspiration Along this rugged way It somehow it took a left turn and lost me...what is this inspiration you refer to???...
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10/17/17 05:20 PM
Lots of discussions going on in this area. Most of it centers on natural market cycles, blind exhuberation among investors, and the Trump wildcards that include trade protectionism, the breaking of international treaties, and North Korea. In the past, things did not matter so m...
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10/17/17 04:43 PM
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=-y6S1sO8b8s&t=29s...
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10/17/17 04:19 PM
Here's an additional document that allows you to read about the entire bill: https://www.congress.gov/bill/115th-congress/house-bill/3945/text?r=169...
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10/17/17 10:11 AM
Thank you Dave, Gavin, Lane and Barry for listening and commenting. I appreciate your feedback very much. Barry the vocalist is Brent Rader. We have been working together for several years on my demos....
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10/17/17 08:52 AM
A theatre piece for sure. Mimmo has a lovely voice (though, as you say, this was originally written for a female vocalist). Nice change-up into the bridge. (I'm with the others regarding the repetition of 'I cry'.) A couple of lyrical suggestions below, just in case you were p...
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10/17/17 02:22 AM
Yes, Sir thank you for pointing that out to me! I'm currently revising the entire lyric. I really appreciate you taking the time to critique and give me your valuable feedback my friend! I'm going to be re-posting this lyric briefly. Thanks again! God bless my friend! Yours in so...
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10/16/17 11:05 AM
Internet Radio/Streaming Broadcast (aka Pandora) I suggest for this service Fieldengineer.com: Another huge freelance marketplace for various services Ex: telecom. The one category that might be of the most interest here is the 'Broadcasting'....
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10/15/17 01:13 PM
Hi DaniLee: Welcome home... JPF is so glad you're back. I have a few suggestions for you to consider... or ignore. First, you will get lots more "viewers" for this lyric over at one of the three lyric forums. No magic to the selection process... all of them work so ...
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10/15/17 12:06 PM
Listening now Douglas. I logged-in with Facebook. Cool Tunes. John ...
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